Looks awesome! Can't wait to pick it up.
Noticed those typos, as well as some others in page 6, though. In the Talon class description, you have "Here we have a duel engine, duel turret..." That particular spelling of "duel" is something that two people generally do with either pistols or swords.  Should be "dual".
Page 1 has a misspelled "Quick" in the "Quik-Checkout" reference for the escape pods (unless this is a trademark kinda term ).
Page 5 should probably read "Props galore will dress up the shell of your starship. Included are Consoles..." (It reads "Includes" right now.)
On page 7, there are a few questionable grammar structures, but not too bothersome, since they could be discounted as "stylistic." Though "huds" should probably be capitalized, since I'm assuming you mean Heads-Up Displays (HUDs).
I'd be willing to help out with editing, too. (As I'm sure everyone else on these boards would!) I've done a good bit of writing, and I just recently got a painting article published over in Fictional Reality (www.fictionalreality.org). Just let me know if I can help...I'm cheap!
I do hope that doesn't come across as too arrogant or snarky on my part; that's most definitely not how it's meant. I totally dig WWG stuff, but I'm sometimes glad that the final products are all pictures (well, with the recent exception of the Eye, which I have no use for)...
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